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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
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The two maps illustrate the compass of a
school
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 in 2004 and the anticipated plan for the development of the
school
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 site over the next 200 years.
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, what stands out from the maps is that
whereas
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 the
school
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 site used to be a quiet playground for
students
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, it will be developed in terms of buildings, facilities and roads, and the number of
students
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 will
also
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 approximately double. In 2004, there was only one
car
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park
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 in the north-west of the
school
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 site where the main entrance to the
school
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 was located;
this
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car
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park
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 will remain in 2024. In 2004 there were two
school
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 buildings, accommodating 600
students
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, there are plans for building the third one in the place of the sports field to accommodate 1000
students
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 in 2024, and
school
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 buildings 1 and 2 will be joined together. A new
car
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park
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 will be erected in the north-east of the
school
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 playground. In the south of the second
car
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park
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, a part of woodland will be removed to build a sports field. In 2024, a road will be constructed from the south of the main entrance to the second
car
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park
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, students, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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