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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of read
books
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 by both genders at The Burnaby Public Library
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period
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 between 2011 to 2014.
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, it is apparent that women read more
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 compared to
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 at the beginning of the given
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 whilst
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 read more than women by a huge difference
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 of the
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. Regarding females, they began in 2011 reading
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around 5,000
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 exceeding males. The line rose steadily till it reached a peak in 2013 with a value of 10,000
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 and declined progressively ending the
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 with 8,000
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 in 2014. Turning to
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, they started in 2011 at roughly 3,000
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,
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 the line showed a dramatic
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 in 2012 resulting
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in 2013 the
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 of
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 read by
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 was much higher than those read by women. In 2014, males read more than females with just above 11,000
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 which was the biggest gap between both genders during the given time frame.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, period, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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