Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home ,leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweight the disadvantages?
Over the years, we have experienced a massive
developement
in the department of information technology. Correct your spelling
development
This
essay exermines
arguments surrounding claims these advances are more beneficial than their disadvantages. As evidenced by social media Correct your spelling
examines
platforms
and internet
news
platforms
Social media has contributed immensely towards the unification of families and friends living in different parts of the world
. People have been able to talk to their loved ones on video calls, making it feel like they are together yet there
might be thousands of miles apart. These include Correct pronoun usage
they
being
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apply
platforms
such
as Whatsapp
and Facebook. Correct your spelling
WhatsApp
For instance
, recently I created a group where I invited all my high school classmates from 2006, In this
group we can interact and and
have fun as Remove the redundancy
apply
of
the old times. Change preposition
in
Currently
we are planning Add a comma
Currently,
of having
a Change preposition
to have
get together
just to have more fun
More importantly, we have great improvements on the Add a hyphen
get-together
internet
news
platforms
. This
has increased the speed of spreading news
around the world
. Anyone with access to the internet
can read or view news
from any country. Some news
are
reported live, meaning you are able to watch the reports live as Change the verb form
is
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
happens
. To make it more fun anyone with a Correct subject-verb agreement
happen
smart phone
can record and report live on any event happening anywhere. Correct your spelling
smartphone
This
means there is nomore
need for Correct your spelling
no more
waiting
professional Add the preposition
waiting for
news
reporters to come and capture the news
to upload it on their official platforms
. The fascinating part is, if you have Correct article usage
the internet
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
then
you will stay updated on everything that is
happening around the world
be it sports or music concerts.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advanments
in information Correct your spelling
advances
techlogy
Correct your spelling
technology
has
more benefits Correct subject-verb agreement
have
to
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for
human kind
because Correct your spelling
humankind
its
now easier to communicate with our friends and relatives and it we can now keep up to date with Replace the word
it's
it is
news
happening around the world
on the go through our mobile phones.Submitted by sisalt100 on
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...