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The line graph below illustrates average monthly sales of four different products over a six-year period. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below illustrates average monthly sales of four different products over a six-year period. Summarize the given information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph shows changes
of
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in
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 average monthly
sales
 of
Plates
,
Plastic
Cups
, Ceramic
Cups
 and
Cutlery
Kits
 between 2015 and 2020.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
number
 of Ceramic
Cups
’ and
Cutlery
Kits’
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Kits
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sales
 had increased
while
Plates
 and
Plastic
Cups
 had seen
decrease
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a decrease
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. Considering products had increased in
number
 of
sales
, approximately 1500
Plates
 and 600
Plastic
Cups
had
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were
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 sold in 2015.
Then
,
sales
 of
Plastic
Cups
 decreased to about 270 units by 2017
while
 at
this
 time the
number
 of
Plates
 increased dramatically peaking at 1800. By the next year,
Plastic
Cups
sales
 saw a slight increase to around 380 being sold
as
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the same
number
 as Ceramic
Cups
, but the amount of
Plates
 sharply decreased to 1000 units. Afterwards,
Plastic
Cups
 and
Plates
 numbers decreased steadily until the end of the period hitting a low of about 20 and 800, respectively. Considering products had decreased in
number
 of
sales
, the
number
 of purchased Ceramic
Cups
 and
Cutlery
Kits
 were around 700 and 800 in 2015.
Then
, the
number
 of
Cutlery
Kits
 experienced
stable
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a stable
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 increase throughout the period reaching a high of about 1100 by 2020 being the most sold product. The
number
 of Ceramic
Cups
,
firstly
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first
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, increased to 1050 by 2017 outracing
Cutlery
Kits
, and,
then
, it plunged to 380 before seeing
notable
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a notable
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 increase by 2019, and the
number
 of acquired
Cutlery
Kits
 by consumers was approximately 1050
at the end
 of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, plates, plastic, cups, cutlery, kits, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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