More and more people no longer read newspapers. They get news about the world through the Internet. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

Today
alot
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a lot
of people tend to read
news
from
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the internet
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internet
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rather than read from paper sources
as
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newspapers
or magazines . So
newspapers
become abandoned
from
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readers. In the
last
years the development
creats
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creates
create
new fields from
differen
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different
sciences,
therefore
the reading is considered one from
this
scope.
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read
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reading
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new
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news
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from
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on
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Internet
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the Internet
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has more
positivs
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positive
positives
aspects than
the
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apply
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negative
aspect
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for readers
for
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example , First of all, various information and knowledge. In fact,
Internet
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has many topics and data
while
newspapers
have limited information about particular objects . A study
publised
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published
in
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New York University that 88% of
those reader
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that reader
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prefered
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preferred
the
internet
to see
news
around
their
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world.
Therefore
internet
contains different sources from different
opinion
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opinions
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.
Second,
The readers are not bound
time
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or place to read.
As well as
reading
news
or information
from
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on
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the internet
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internet
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is very
easly
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easy
and
quicly
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quick
.
For example
you
wont
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read about sport only search from
google
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Google
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or various
webside
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website
websites
about your topic .
Also
save
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saves
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your time when you looking for
informartion
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information
.
However
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newspapers
have limited data.
As a
result
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result,
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Surf
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the
internet
gives you
advocate
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the opportunity
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to read more and more because It
content
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on
comprehousich
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comprehensive
knowledge. To
sumb
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sum
, In my
opinion
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opinion,
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read
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from
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internet
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has many benefits
such
as, you know
news
about your world.
likewise
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likewise,
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you acquire diverse Sciences
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Grammar and Vocabulary
Make sure to carefully review your essay for grammatical errors and ensure the proper use of prepositions and articles. For example, 'read from Internet' should be 'read from the Internet' and 'prefered the internet' should be 'preferred the Internet'.
Task Achievement
Develop your ideas with more comprehensive and relevant examples. For example, instead of a single statistic, you could talk more about how people use various news websites or social media to stay informed.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should briefly state the topic and your perspective, while the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your opinion.
Content
You have provided some valid points supporting the convenience and benefits of getting news through the Internet.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the main topic and provides a clear stance on the development of reading news online rather than from newspapers.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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