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The chart and table below given information about tourist at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below given information about tourist at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented pie chart and table compare data about special holiday resorts that are for Australian tourists.
Overall
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, it is important that Earoupian who visit
Australia
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 spend more time in it
while
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 the
Asian
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 which has the massive number of tourists spend less time than other continents inhabitants.
According to
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 the diagrams, most Australian tourists are from Asia ar37%;
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,
this
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Asian
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 population prefer to stay in 5-star hotels for a week and they travel to
Australia
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 for sightseeing. Europe, the second one for the figure of passengers by 35%, citizens have a large staying of 16 days;
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, they choose either camping or caravan for accommodation and most of them select
Australia
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 for not only swimming but
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 sunbathing. The pictures demonstrate that Americans, who are the third travellers by nearly half of
Asian
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 passengers, spend two weeks at 4-star hotels in
Australia
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;
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, their initial selection in
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 country is the same as
Asian
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 people. The
last
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 one is Others, which have 10% of communities that have journey to
Australia
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;
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, their length of stay is 10 days in places that same as European societies.
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, they designed
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 country for surfing.
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