The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information 

Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the total number of inquiries of
tourist
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tourists
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received by
Tourist
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the Tourist
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Information Office during six months in 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that
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communication methods both in person and by telephone
had
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risen considerably.
By contrast
, written inquiries continued falling over
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the
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period shown. In January 2011,
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contact was around 400 reports.
Whereas
, telephone accounted for slightly over twofold as in person. These two types had extremely increased to respective almost 2000 and slightly below 1600 in June.
In addition
, trends for using
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the telephone
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to contact the tourist officers seemed
went
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up fluctuatively.
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,
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personal asking rose significantly. Written information from visitors went down month by month during a six-month period. In the initial month, which was January, there were about 700 travellers sending messages to the authority.
However
, in June, only roughly 400 people did
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way.
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a massive decrease and became the latest option to communicate with visitor officers.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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