The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The line graph illustrates various types of sources of air pollutants found in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
, there were three major sources including
transport
Correct article usage
the transport
show examples
system, operation of industry and
households
. Industrial sectors accounted for the highest production of
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
show examples
followed by transportation and
households
. In 1990, there were slightly 6
million
tonnes
of air
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
show examples
released by a massive activity of industry.
However
,
this
condition dropped significantly by roughly 2
million
tonnes
in 2005 or threefold lower than 15 years beforehand.
This
caused
massive
Correct article usage
a massive
show examples
decreased
Replace the word
decrease
show examples
in terms of
total
Add an article
the total
show examples
amount of air pollution in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
.
In addition
, around 7
million
tonnes
of
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
show examples
released
Add a missing verb
were released
show examples
in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
show examples
in 1990 and by 2005, only about 3
million
tonnes
produced
Add a missing verb
were produced
show examples
by industry.  Transportation and
households
had reverse trends. In the initial year which was 1990, the total proportion of both was
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
roughly 2
million
tonnes
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
annual production of pollution.
However
, in 2005,
transport
Correct article usage
the transport
show examples
system had a small
increased
Replace the word
increase
show examples
.
By contrast
,
households
had done up to around 1
million
tonnes
Submitted by hikmanurdin04 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
What to do next:
Look at other essays: