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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
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The line graph illustrates various types of sources of air pollutants found in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1990 to 2005.
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, there were three major sources including
transport
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the transport
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 system, operation of industry and
households
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. Industrial sectors accounted for the highest production of
pollutions
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pollution
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 followed by transportation and
households
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. In 1990, there were slightly 6
million
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tonnes
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 of air
pollutions
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pollution
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 released by a massive activity of industry.
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,
this
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 condition dropped significantly by roughly 2
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005 or threefold lower than 15 years beforehand.
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 caused
massive
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a massive
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decreased
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 in terms of
total
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the total
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 amount of air pollution in
UK
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the UK
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.
In addition
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, around 7
million
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tonnes
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 of
pollutions
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pollution
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released
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were released
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1990 and by 2005, only about 3
million
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tonnes
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produced
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were produced
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 by industry.  Transportation and
households
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 had reverse trends. In the initial year which was 1990, the total proportion of both was
same
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the same
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in
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apply
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roughly 2
million
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tonnes
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for
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of
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 annual production of pollution.
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, in 2005,
transport
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the transport
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 system had a small
increased
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increase
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.
By contrast
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,
households
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 had done up to around 1
million
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tonnes
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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