It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
In recent years
it
has Correct pronoun usage
there
been witnessed
a decrease in the number of Verb problem
apply
students
who decided to pursue the study of science
as a subject. The main reason is that school programs do not focus enough on science
-related subjects so the basic knowledges
of these fields are not considered enough by the Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
students
. For sure it will have catastrophic consequences on society because science
is crucial for the development of future innovations.
From a certain point of view, students
are scared of not being able to pursue a career in science
because of the pervasive myth of how hard it is to study science
and to have success in that field. As a consequence
of that always fewer students
choose that as the main subject of their studies. In addition
, there is a big gender difference between males and females because women undergo the prejudice of not having the same capacities as men to become scientists. For example
, many universities try to encourage women to attend scientific and STEM courses through economic benefits tailored specifically for them.
Results from what I have been
previously highlighted is that Unnecessary verb
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this
reduction of people who are invested in scientific fields has a huge impact on society. It is extremely important to focus on scientific research because it is what guarantees progress and innovation and better our life conditions. As revealed by our modern technological revolution, nothing that is
now part of our everyday life would be here if it were not for scientific progress.
To conclude
, it is fundamental that schools invest more on
scientific programs because Change preposition
in
science
is what really guarantees the progress of our society and it is a loss for everybody the reduction of students
who pursues
it.Correct subject-verb agreement
pursue
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task achievement
While your introduction and conclusion are clear, adding more detail and structure to your body paragraphs would provide a more comprehensive response. For instance, detailing which specific school programs or subjects are lacking focus could help.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas are well-organized, but some transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be smoother. For example, linking the myth of science being hard more clearly with the lack of school program focus.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a strong conclusion, summarizing the main points effectively.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both parts of the question (causes and effects) with relevant points.
task achievement
You include relevant examples to support your points, such as the reference to universities encouraging women to attend STEM courses.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite