IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
numbers
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number
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of
theft
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thefts
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per 1,000
vehicles
in Great Britain, Sweden, France, and Canada, from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, it is apparent that the UK had the highest
numbers
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number
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of stolen
vehicles
among all other countries, whilst both France and Canada had the lowest. Sweden had a relatively low number of
thefts
at the start, but it grew during the decade. Regarding Britain, they started the
period
with around 17
thefts
per 1,000
vehicles
, and the line peaked at 20
thefts
in 1993,
then
dipped
at
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to
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16
thefts
in the next year.
Afterwards
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it hit the same peak in 1997 and ended the given
period
with the same dip at just 16
thefts
. Sweden began with considerably low theft rates at 8,
then
the line increased gradually over the years till it reached the highest at 14
thefts
at the end
of the
period
given.
On the other hand
, the figure shows that both
France
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and
Canada
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Canada's
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thefts
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rates remained relatively the same over the given years,
initially
with around 6 and 7
thefts
respectively and both ended the
period
with 6
thefts
per thousand
vehicles
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, thefts, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dipped" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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