The table and pie charts give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.

The table and pie charts give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000.
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The charts illustrate the data related to the importation of
fish
supplies in the United States in three different moments of the late XX century (1988, 1992 and 2000).
While
the table shows the total value of the products in billions of dollars, the pie charts represent the proportion of the sources where the goods come from.
Overall
, one can notice a gradual increase in the demand for
fish
in the US, passing from $6.57 billion expenditure in 1988, to $8.52 billion in 1992, and to $10.72 billion in 2000. The two most significant
fish
suppliers to the US in 1988 were Canada and China, which together accounted for 73%.
Subsequently
,
this
proportion had been mitigated by other countries. Anyhow, Canada and China still are the main
fish
exporter
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to the US. As far as the suppliers are concerned, the most significant shift regards Canada, which passed from being the leader of
this
market in 1988 with 60% of the
overall
import, to being third alongside China with 28% in 2000. Indeed, China’s
export
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which comprised
of
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13% in 1988 increased to 20% in 1992, and
lastly
to 30% in 2000.
Likewise
, other countries started to be more present in the market, with a shift between 1988 and 1992 from 27% to 46% of the
overall
import.
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