THe chart below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world.
The charts illustrate the percentage of water used in 3
sectors
, relavant
to human activities, in 6 different countries of the world.
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relevant
Overall
, there are 3 sectors
of human activities that use
water, consisting of Industrial, Agricultural and Domestic use
. It is obviouse
that Correct your spelling
obvious
Agricultural
is the Replace the word
agriculture
higher
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highest
use
in lot
of those different areas, Change the article
a lot
while
Domestic is the lowest use
in every single countries
.
The amount of water used for Change to a singular noun
country
Agricultural
had a higher number, compared to Replace the word
agriculture
other
two Correct article usage
the other
sectors
. Especially Africa, Central Asia, South East Asia and South America that
used 84 Correct pronoun usage
apply
percent
, 88 percent
, 81 percent
, and 71 percent
.
By contrast
, Domestic is the lowest use
compare to 3 sectors
, the percentage is only 7 percent
to 19 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in every Change the spelling
per cent
areas
. Change to a singular noun
area
Besides
that industrial is one of the sectors
that depends on the country, for instance
North America is 48 percent
, while
in Central Asia use
foe Industrial only 5 percent
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