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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world
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the charts illustrate the percentage of used
water
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 in 3
sectors
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, relevant to humans, in 6 different countries
from
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around
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 the world.
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, there are 3
sectors
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 of
water
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use
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 for human activities, consisting of Industrial, Agriculture and Domestic
use
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. Agriculture is the highest used in those different 6 areas,
while
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 Domestic is the lowest
water
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use
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 in every single area. The amount of
water
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 used in 3
sectors
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 from 6 countries, Agriculture was the highest percentage. Especially in Africa, Central Asia, South East Asia and South America
that
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apply
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use
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water
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 for 84 per
cent
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, 88 per
cent
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, 81 per
cent
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 and 71 per
cent
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.
Also
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, It is
obvious
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 saw that Domestic is the lowest
water
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use
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 two
sectors
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. In 6 different areas are used Domestic only 7 per
cent
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 to 19 per
cent
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.
besides
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 that, Industrial are one of the
sectors
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 that depend on the country it has per
cent
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 from 5 per
cent
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 until 53 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, sectors, use, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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