The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
amount
of
shops
that closed and opened in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, both
of
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opened and closed
shops
amount
decreased
given
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during
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the period and both of
figures
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the figures
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seen
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fluctuated.
However
,
opened
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the opened
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shops
amount
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sharply fell compared to closed
shops
, approximately 5500
shops
. Closed
shops
amount
initially
began
6500
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at 6500
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and
this
figure peaked in 2013
just
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at just
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over 7000. After that, in 2015 closed
shops
hit a low of, under
the
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1000. In 2016, there was a significant
rose
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rise
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about
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in
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closed
shops
,
this
figure increased
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by
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just over 5000 and
last
three years
amount
of closed
shop
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shops
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seen plateou
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has decreased
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.
On the other hand
, opened
shops
amount
start with 8500 and
this
was a peaked
amount
. In 2012 opened closed
amount
contributed 4000 and from 2012 to 2014
this
amount
gradually increased and reached just over 6000. In 20115,
opened
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the number of
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shops
amount
declined and reached
exact
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the exact
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figure in 2012, which is 4000. From 2015 to 2017 opened
shops
remain
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remained
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steady and final year
amount
of opened
shops
decreased from 4000 to 3000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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