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The plans below show the site of an airport now and hpw it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The figures show a transformation of
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the southwest
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southwest
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 airport. They compare two maps, before development and after development. There are some features of transformation.
First,
the number of gates will increase from 8 to 18. Because of
this
, the shape of
boarding
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the boarding
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area
 will be totally different.
Old
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The old
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 one is
I
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in
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 shape.
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,
new
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the new
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 one is Y shape. The
area
 will be expanded.
Moreover
, the walkway will be replaced
to
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 a
skytrain
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, which
connect
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connects
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 to the
center
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centre
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 of
boarding
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the boarding
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area
, regarding
to
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the
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apply
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transformation.
Second,
between
boarding
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the boarding
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area
 and security passport control, shops will open. You can purchase some
stuffs
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stuff
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 after checking your ID.
Third,
on
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in
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 the
are
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area
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 of departure, the number of
entrance
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entrances
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 will be twice, and there
are
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will be
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 new
facility
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facilities
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of
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 bag drop. You can pass your luggage before ID checking. On the other side, arrivals will have two doors and
cafe
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a cafe
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 shop, ATM and
car
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a car
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 hire shop will be added.
To sum up
, the arrangement of the airport will be thoroughly changed, and
this
 airport will be used by
much
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many
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 more people than before.
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introduction conclusion present
Try to make your introduction more engaging by providing a concise summary of the entire transformation. This sets the tone for your essay.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. Using linking words can help improve the coherence of your essay.
relevant specific examples
Provide more specific details and comparisons to illustrate the development more vividly. This can help in enhancing the overall clarity and task achievement.
clear comprehensive ideas
Try to make your paragraphs more balanced in terms of the information they present. Avoid having heavily detailed sections followed by less detailed ones.
complete response
You have included all the major changes occurring at the airport, which demonstrates a good understanding and complete response to the task.
logical structure
Your essay follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow the transformations.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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