choose a place for people to visit in your area. write a review of the place. say what people can do and see. use imperative verbs to give advice

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Khoramabad is really nice.khoramabad it’s
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Lorestan
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in Iran.
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mouthful
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.There are a lot of waterfalls.There are some mountains around
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.There is a forest park and zoo in
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.There is the Dalal Aflac castle in
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it is old.the qu lake in
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. Khoram Abad
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.people
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swim and Enjoy the view.
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the attractions and experiences available in Khoramabad. For example, describe the Dalal Aflac castle, forest park, or zoo in detail to engage your readers and provide a complete picture.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are logically structured. Start with an introduction, followed by detailed descriptions, and conclude with a summary. This helps readers follow your narrative easily. Transitions between sentences also need improvement to enhance the flow of the text.
task achievement
You have mentioned several attractions in Khoramabad, which provides readers with an idea of what they can see and do.
coherence cohesion
There is an effort to list the points methodically, which shows initial understanding of structuring an essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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