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write a review about a place. what can people see and do there. use imperative verbs to give advice

#review #place #people #verbs #advice
Hi guys ! Today I want to speak about Tagh Bostan . Tagh Bostan is a very big , old ,and historical place.
This
 place has a very small lake ,and in the lake you can see some ducks.
Iranian
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Iranians
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 and people from
another country
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other countries
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 come to visit Tagh Bostan. There are many tall trees and beautiful flowers. We need to keep clean it . In my
opinion
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every one
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everyone
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 has to see it. People can take photos here .
At
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 the
end
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 l hope people in
this
 place have a good time.
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coherence cohesion
Try to use a variety of sentence structures to make your writing more interesting. Currently, many sentences are short and simple, which can make the text seem a bit repetitive.
task achievement
Instead of listing features, try to describe them in more detail. For example, explain why the trees and flowers are beautiful or provide some historical context for Tagh Bostan.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors and punctuation issues. For example, 'every one' should be 'everyone,' and there should be no space before commas.
task achievement
Your essay provides a clear introduction to Tagh Bostan and what can be seen and done there.
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The use of imperative verbs like 'keep' and 'take' effectively gives practical advice to the readers.

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