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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: - remind your employer what the course was about - explain why the course was useful to you in your work - suggest why the course may be suitable for some of your other colleagues

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to provide my feedback on the AutoForm training course in metal die simulation, recently held at the Automotive Innovation
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. The program primarily focused on the
design
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 and simulation of die-cast components used in automotive body manufacturing. It offered an in-depth overview of both conceptual and detailed
design
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 processes,
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 introducing the latest software updates and technological developments in the field. The insights I gained from
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 course have been highly advantageous in my current role. By
utilizing
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 engineering software to
design
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 dies, I am now able to evaluate initial sketches more accurately before proceeding to the manufacturing phase.
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 has helped me detect potential
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 issues at an early stage, ultimately enhancing efficiency and reducing
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 production costs. I believe
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 training would
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 be highly beneficial to other members of our engineering team. It not only sharpens technical knowledge but
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 equips participants with hands-on experience in modern
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 tools.
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task achievement
The letter is well-structured and covers all the points requested in the task.
coherence
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy to read and follow.
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Using a friendly but professional tone throughout the letter enhances the communication.
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You effectively reminded the employer about the course content.
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Your explanation of how the course helped you was clear and detailed.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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