You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart illustrates the proportion of Australian exports with Japan, the US, China, and India between the
years
1990 and 2012.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that China and India had an increase,
while
the USA and Japan decreased in trade with Australia. In 1990, China had only nearly 3% and after 5
years
, it slowly grew up to exactly 5%.
Moreover
, it started to rise gradually and reached exactly a one-forth, in the year 2010 and in the next two
years
they reached a peak point of approximately 28%.
Additionally
, India was steady at the beginning of the chart at about 3% and in 2000, it started slightly going up and after a decade, reached its maximum point at just above 5%, but it started to fall and fell 5% in 2012. For Japan, it began with
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drop from around 26% to one-fifth, in 1995 and it did not stop and took point nearly 17% after 5
years
. It was steady at
this
level and again slowly went down to almost 16% and it stayed until the end of the period. The USA showed
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at the start
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dropping to 7% and
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up to 11%, in the
years
1995 and 2000, respectively.
Finally
, it started to steadily fall and in 2010 reached 5%, and again started to increase.
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