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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
birth
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 and
death
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 rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020,
according to
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 United Nations statistics. In the early period from 1975 to 1995, the
birth
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rate
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 remained consistently higher than the
death
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rate
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, with both experiencing a gradual increase. In 1975, the
birth
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rate
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 was approximately 1.2
million
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,
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 the
death
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rate
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 was slightly below 1
million
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. By 1995, the
birth
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rate
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 had risen to around 1.7
million
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,
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 the
death
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rate
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 increased more modestly to about 1.4
million
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.
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, the trend shifts significantly from 2005 onwards. The
birth
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rate
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 a notable surge, reaching around 3
million
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 in 2005 and maintaining
this
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 high level into 2015 and 2025. Meanwhile, the
death
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rate
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 shows a more gradual increase, reaching just over 1.5
million
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 by 2025.
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, the chart reveals a significant increase in both
birth
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 and
death
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 rates over the 50-year period, with the
birth
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rate
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 consistently surpassing the
death
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rate
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, particularly after 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rate, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • fluctuation
  • demographic
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • incremental
  • statistical
  • longitudinal
  • population growth
  • life expectancy
  • fertility rate
  • mortality rate
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
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