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The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table summarises the percentage of
population
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the population
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live
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living
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 in different types of housing in three parts of Australia. Features are
then
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 sorted by years.
Overall
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, the choice of settlements of
people
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shown
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 a similar pattern across regions and only
slightly
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slight
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 changes took place in those 5 years.
House
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, semi-detached, and Flat were the major type of dwellings in Australia, where approximately 99
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percent
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per cent
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 of the population chose to live in. Among these types,
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the house
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house
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houses
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is
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were
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 the
more
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 popular across that time, where the percentage number of
people
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lived
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living
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 in was three times more than the sum of Semi-detached and flat, both of which
provides
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provided
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 settlements for about 10
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percent
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per cent
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 of residents.
However
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, a downward trend has
be
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 found during
this
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 temporal period, with a 2
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percent
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per cent
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 of
decrease
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the decrease
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 in the ratio of
people
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lives
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living
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 in
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house
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the house
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.
Consequently
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, an increasing percentage number of
people
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 settled in semi-detached
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house
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houses
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 and
flat
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flats
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 in Australia, except for flat residents in the Northern Territory. As for another 1
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percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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, they decided to settle in
other type
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another type
other types
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 of houses during that period of time.
This
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 number
raised
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rose
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 around ten times in
Northern
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the Northern
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territory
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Territory
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 and
experience
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experienced
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 a 3
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percent
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per cent
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 increase after 5 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, house, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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