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The pie charts and table give information about total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000

The pie charts and table give information about total value and sources of fish imported to the US between 1988 and 2000
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The given pie charts and table in combination present information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the
Unites
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United
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 States between 1988 and 2000.
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, it is clearly presented that
value
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the value
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 of the imported fish is significantly increased over
this
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 period. Getting back to the details the total cost in 1988 was 6.57 billion dollars,
this
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 number steadily increased and reached 8.52 billion in 1992 and 10.72
billions
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billion
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 in 2000. As observed from the
presented
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pie charts Canada was
main
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the main
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 supplier in 1988. But
further
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 amount dramatically decreased, in 1992
proportion
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the proportion
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 was 34 per
cent
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 and in 2000 it was 29 per
cent
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.
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, starting with 13 per
cent
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 in 1988, China became
more
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a more
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 noticeable importer of fish to the United
states
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States
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. In 1992 it was 20 per
cent
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 and in 2000 it rose up to 30 per
cent
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.
Final
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The final
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 fact to mention is that
portion
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the portion
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 of importers from other countries fluctuated over
thin
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a short
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 period. Beginning with 27 per
cent
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 in 1988, it increased up to 46 in 1992 and slightly decreased to 42 per
cent
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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