The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025 according to United Nations statistics.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1975 to 2025 according to United Nations statistics.
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The graph illustrates data about how
much
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many births
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birth
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and
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death
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deaths
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occured
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occurred
in Switzerland based on the figures
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UN
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between 1975 to 2020.
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,
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the figure
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birth
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births
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experienced a dramatic rise, despite remaining stable at the
begining
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beginning
, the
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of
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death
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deaths
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decreased, considering a peak, over the fifty years. It is noticeable that, the greatest
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difference
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of
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birth
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births
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and
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death
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deaths
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happend
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happened
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in 2025. From 1975 to 1995, the figure for
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rose gradually from 1.3 to 1.7
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, despite staying constant at 1.3
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millions
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in the first decade, but the rate of
death
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saw a decrease from one to 1.5
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millions
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.
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, in 1985, the difference between
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in the lowest numbers nearly 1.3. In the years 1995 to 2020, the statistics of
birth
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jumped from 1.7 to over 2.5
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millions
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, growing gradually to 3.3 in two
decade
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later
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the rate of
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have
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fallen to 75 thousand people in 2020. The most
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statistics
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death
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and the lowest figure
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birth
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acoounted
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accounted
for 0.75 and 3.3
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millions
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in the
last
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year, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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