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Social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face – to – face contact in this century. Do you think the advantage of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #facebook #twitter #face #contact #century #advantage
Social media has been one of the biggest
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 of
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competely
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revolutinized
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 the ways of communication. In upcoming paragraphs, we will discuss both the pros and cons of using these
apps
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To begin
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 for communication with
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. The predominant one
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convenience, as folks can connect themselves with their friends residing in a different part of the world without having to move out of their comfort of home.
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, it is a great way of staying in touch with your loved ones as
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video calls and face times
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 like same as meeting
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However
, if you don't feel like talking to someone you can always send them
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 via
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messenger
. To add more, in order to strengthen your bonds, these applications provide you with
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 wonderful feature of reminding you of your loved ones' birthdays and anniversaries, which makes them feel that you have been thinking about them. Despite
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having lots of advantages, these wonderful
apps
 come with some disadvantages as well. The first and foremost is the lack of confidence in doing face-to-face talks with others as
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 new generation folks prefer spending their
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 on their smartphones rather than talking to their
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 ones. The kids are scared of talking in front of their family members let alone the public
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 as they are not comfortable
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doing so. A survey conducted by Harward University states that 8 out of 10 youngsters prefer to chat rather than
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talk in person.
To conclude
,
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 these social media applications have
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 of cons which can not be overlooked
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the pros
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 still positives of using these
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seems
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 to outweigh the negatives.
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task achievement
Try to address and develop both sides of the argument equally. Currently, the essay seems slightly more focused on the advantages, which may leave an impression of imbalance.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on one main idea with clear links between ideas and paragraphs. This will enhance the essay's overall coherence and cohesion.
introduction conclusion
The essay effectively introduces the topic with a clear thesis statement, and it provides a conclusion that ties the main points together nicely.
coherence cohesion
There are relevant examples supporting the main ideas, such as the survey by Harvard University which adds credibility to your argument.

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