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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data is shown as a map which illustrates
development
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the development
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 of Chorleywood
village
 from 1868 to 1994. The map shows enhanced areas by their time periods and
location
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the location
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 of
roads
 on the blueprint. At first glance,
roads
 are built
perpendecular
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perpendicular
 to each other, creating
rectangular
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the rectangular
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 shape of the
village
. At the downtown of
this
 place located Chorleywood
park
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Park
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 and Golf
course
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, and
this
 park can be regarded as a
fundemental
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fundamental
 place of the
village
.
Additionally
,
central
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the central
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 part of the
village
 was established at the
begining
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beginning
, and other areas
implemented
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were implemented
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 after some time.
Village
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The village
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 is comprised of three types of
roads
, showing diversification of transports. There are two main
roads
 that were inherent
initially
. Both of the
roads
starts
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 from
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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, one of them going to the east and
other
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the other
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 one going to
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the south-west
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south-west
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southwest
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.
Then
Railwaw
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Railway
 was built in 1909, which connected
west
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the west
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 and east parts of the
village
.
At
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 the end, it was
Motorway
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the Motorway
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 that
got
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 built in 1970vcreating a bond between south and north, and it had
circular
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a circular
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 intersection with
main
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the main
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 road. The initial part of the city was established at the central part,
then
imidiately
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immediately
 spread out into
south
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the south
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 direction.
Consequently
, it magnified in both west and east directions. Ultimately,
east
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the east
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 and
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south-west
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south west
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southwest
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 parts were built
in
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apply
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between 1970 and 1994, ending
village's
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the village's
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 development
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, roads with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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