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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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The chart given depicts the effect of
sugar
 & honey consumption on the
level
 of acid in the mouth by the time they have eaten;
however
, the
PH
level
 will cause
the
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tooth's
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 decay.
Overall
, by eating something sweet, it will increase the
acidity
level
 significantly. Afterwards, the
acidity
 will gradually decrease over time and will back to normal for above 30 minutes. On top of that, cane
sugar
 is the biggest influence on the acid
level
. Cane
sugar
 directly turns the
PH
level
 from 7 to approximately 4.5
PH
level
.
Moreover
, it
also
 requires the longest time to get back
the
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 normal acid, which is 40 minutes. Meanwhile, honey only needs around 25 minutes to normalize the
acidity
. Honey is the least dangerous one compared to those sugars. It only brings the
acidity
 to a maximum of just above 5
PH
, which is around 1.5
PH
 and 0.5
PH
 under the cane
sugar
 and fruit
sugar
, respectively.
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