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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experiences. Write at least 250 words.

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Plastic
 usage be it in the form of bags, bottles or packaging
have
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serious
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a serious
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 impact on our surroundings. In the following paragraphs, we will dive into the harmful effects of
plastic
 on the environment
alongwith
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along with
 some suggestions to solve the issue.
To begin
 with, one of the major damage
plastic
 causes is because of its longevity as it does not decompose easily and
stay
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stays
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at
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in
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 the same place for years which
further
 results in soil and land pollution.
As when
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When
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 you dump something
plastic
 in the garbage, which is
further
 collected by the municipal to the deposition site where garbage is left for decomposition.
Plastic
 seems to be the only thing which
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
 decay and stays
same
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the same
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 for many years. If, by any chance, some stray animal consumes it, can cause serious health issues which might lead to the death of the animal. Being aware of the seriousness of the situation, the
government
authoritites
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authorities
 have taken some measures to reduce the use of
plastic
.
For instance
, in developed countries
such
 as Canada, America and
Austraila
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Australia
 local authorities have banned the use of
plastic
 bags at
the
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apply
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grocery stores, even for take-outs,
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and restaurents
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restaurents
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restaurants
 have started serving
the
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wooden cutlery
instead
 of
plastic
 ones. All these measures seem to lower the
plastic
 usage to a significant level.
However
, efforts from
government
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the government
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 are not enough as
general
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the general
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 public
need
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needs
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 to take some measures from their end too. First of all, people should make sure that they follow all the guidelines given by the local
government
.
Following
this
, they should encourage themselves
for using
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to use
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 reusable bags for shopping.
To conclude
,
government
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the government
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 alone can not function to completely reduce the use of plastics, they would need the support of
public
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the public
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 in order to implement the rules.
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coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present, but could be more robust. Ensure the introduction clearly outlines the main points, and the conclusion summarizes them effectively.
task achievement
Develop ideas more fully with specific and relevant examples. This adds clarity and strengthens the task response.
task achievement
Work on expanding the explanation of how plastic affects both marine and terrestrial wildlife, along with mentioning some statistical data if possible to add weight to arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all sentences are logically connected. Use more linking words and phrases to improve the flow.
language
Check for some minor grammatical issues to ensure clarity (e.g., ‘does not’ instead of ‘doesnot’).
task achievement
The essay addresses both the damage caused by plastic and the potential solutions by governments and individuals.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is well-organized with clear paragraphs.
task achievement
Relevant measures taken by developed countries were mentioned, showing awareness of global efforts.

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