Describe how is your elementary school looks like?
Elementary
school
is one of the base
educations we have as we were a child. There are two types of elementary Correct word choice
basic
school
, those are Public Fix the agreement mistake
schools
School
and Private Fix the agreement mistake
Schools
school
. Personally, I Fix the agreement mistake
schools
was
Change the verb form
was studying
study
in Private
elementary Correct article usage
a Private
school
which was located in Yogyakarta, Indonesia. It was called SD Kanisius, the school
was a catholic-based education school
which
most of the Correct word choice
and
students
are
Wrong verb form
were
non-moslem
. The Correct your spelling
non-Muslim
school
contains 6 classes only with each class defined each
grade in Change preposition
as each
Elementary
Correct article usage
the Elementary
School
education system, for
instance
let’s say it is “Class 1” so the class belongs to the first grader and so on.
Just like any other Add a comma
instance,
school
across the country, in Indonesia we have our own education culture system like uniform
, way
of study
, rules, etc. For instance
uniform
, in my school
we used to have varies
Replace the word
various
of
Change preposition
apply
uniform
for each day of the week, on Monday we used to wear Fix the agreement mistake
uniforms
red
and white Add an article
a red
the red
uniform
with Fix the agreement mistake
uniforms
red
Add an article
a red
the red
tie
, where the pants Fix the agreement mistake
ties
was
red and the shirt was white. On Tuesday and Change the verb form
were
Wednesday
we wore a special Add a comma
Wednesday,
uniform
from our school
, the shirt was white but the pants was
Change the verb form
were
with
triangle shapes yellow Change preposition
apply
colored
with Change the spelling
coloured
yellow
bow tie, Correct article usage
a yellow
moreover
on Thursday we wore scout Add a comma
moreover,
uniform
and Friday we wore School
’s Batik and on Saturday we had a sport activites
so we wore our Correct your spelling
activities
sport
Change the noun form
sports
uniform
.
Moving on to way
of Add an article
a way
the way
study
, I believed
all children have their own Wrong verb form
believe
favorite
subjects in Change the spelling
favourite
school
at least one despite of lot of subjects were
given to Wrong verb form
being
students
. For me personally, I love Mathematics
for me solving a numerical problem its
so exciting and convenient to do because for me to solve a real-time problem is more sensible than you have to guessing about the problem with Correct your spelling
is
what if
questions. Add a hyphen
what-if
Moreover
, we can implemented
math in real life Change the verb form
implement
such
as when you
count the money Correct pronoun usage
we
you
have right now or when Correct pronoun usage
we
you
want to summarize Correct pronoun usage
we
your
work with Correct pronoun usage
our
lot
of numerical problems, and our life basically contains math in every single thing we do, Change the article
a lot
for
instance
when we are on our Add a comma
instance,
way
to our place destination we can count the times to arrives. Furthermore
, subjects in school
will not be fun and interested
for Replace the word
interesting
students
to study
on
if the teachers are not friendly enough to their Change preposition
apply
students
, in this
case
my Add the comma(s)
case,
favorite
teacher was Mam Ria, she was my math teacher she taught me Change the spelling
favourite
mathematics
in a fun and easy to learn way
which made me eager to learn more about mathematics
she taught and said to me that mathematics
is easy to learn if youre
willing to learn about it, so I sum up that when it comes to learning its all about mindset.Correct your spelling
you're
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