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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting the relevant and main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting the relevant and main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The upper chart displays the changes
of
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in
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 percentages of households with three kinds of large-size electrical appliances over a century and the lower one shows the changes in hours spent on housework every
week
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 with the same
time
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 interval as the
last
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 one. It is obvious that the
time
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 it takes to do housework kept drastically decreasing from 1920 to 1980 as the percentage of
houses
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 equipped with
refrigerators
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 and vacuum cleaners were all climbing up in the same period of
time
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. The
refrigerators
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 have been the most popular household electrical appliance ever since 1920 when its ownership was zero. Meanwhile, the washing machines and the vacuum cleaners had been installed in 40% and 30% of the
houses
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, respectively. The percentage of installation of
refrigerators
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 was always rising until 1980 when the figure was 100% and remained unchanged for the next 40 years. A similar pattern took place in the ownership of vacuum cleaners but the peak showed up 20 years later than that of
refrigerators
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 in 2000. The washing machines were installed in 70% of
houses
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 in 1960.
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, it didn't become more popular since
then
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. With more electrical appliances deployed, the
time
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 people spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning the
houses
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 every
week
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 became less and less. In 1920, it took people 50 hours per
week
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 to finish the above housework. With the aid of electrical appliances, the figure had been significantly reduced to only 10 hours a
week
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, time, houses, refrigerators with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • household
  • percentage
  • refrigerator
  • vacuum cleaner
  • washing machine
  • steady increase
  • significant decrease
  • correlation
  • housework
  • number of hours
  • per week
  • period
  • rise
  • reach
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