The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.
The graph illustrates the average
growth
in domestic product in affluent nations, nations that have embraced a global business approach, and those that have not. There are 2 opposing trends in the graph, where wealthy countries are experiencing a significant decline
while
globalisers
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globalised
globalists
are experiencing a fairly sharp increase. In the 1960s rich countries experienced the highest
growth
of domestic products, where the
growth
rate almost reached 5
percent
. For 3 decades, there was a decline of more than half
where
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whereas
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in 1960 there was only a
growth
of 2
percent
. On the opposite side,
globalisers
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globalised
globalists
actually experienced very large
growth
from 1960 to 1990. in 1960 it was only 1.2
percent
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per cent
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but in 1990 the
growth
almost reached 5
percent
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per cent
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.
Non-globalisers
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Non-globaliser
countries experienced
growth
fluctuations for 3 decades,where the highest
growth
occurred
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occurring
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in 1970.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • affluent nations
  • global business orientation
  • sustained growth
  • investment in technology
  • skilled labor
  • fluctuations
  • global trade
  • vulnerability
  • global market shifts
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • reliance on local markets
  • limited exposure
  • economic downturns
  • implications
  • economic policies
  • strategies
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