The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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The charts illustrate several reasons for adults to continue their
study
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and the cost allocation of their educational program.
Overall
, the primary reason for adults deciding to
study
is interest in subjects and the course should be shared to not only the individuals
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but
also
to the employers and
tax payers
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taxpayers
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as well. Looking at the bar chart, four out of ten adults opt to
study
because
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interesting the subject is.
Then
, the second reason is to obtain some qualifications with 38% of them.
Moreover
, some people think continuing their
study
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will help their job and increase their opportunity to obtain promotion, with 22% and 20%, respectively. Meanwhile, even though each individual should pay
their
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for their
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education, 60% of all
cost
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costs
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should be paid by other stakeholders,
such
as employers and tax
payer
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payers
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. Some people think the proportion will be 35% for the employers and the remaining for the
tax payers
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taxpayers
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.
Thus
, the
invidiuals
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individuals
only pay their tuition fee by not more than 40 of
total
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the total
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cost.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study with synonyms.
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