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The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show exports between the US and Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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pie chart illustrates the exportation in
millions
 between
US
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the US
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 and
Vietnam
.
Overall
, the highest
export
 from
Vietnam
 to
US
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the US
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 is coffee and from the US to
Vietnam
 is aircraft parts. The least
export
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exports
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 happening from
Vietnam
 are garments and other goods and from
US
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the US
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 it is cars.
Vietnam
having
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has
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 its highest exports
for
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of
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 coffee resulting in $23
millions
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million
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. Fruits and vegetables take the second position corresponding to exportation to
US
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the US
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 taking
it
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its
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 number to $16
millions
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million
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.
However
, Seafood taking third position resulting
only
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in only
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 in $4.4
millions
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million
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of
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in
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export
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exports
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 followed by rice which is at $4.2
millions
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million
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. The least
export
 done by
Vietnam
 is of garments and Other
good
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goods
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 with a number of only 2
millions
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million
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. For US exports to
Vietnam
, Aircraft parts bring in substantially more money
then
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than
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 the other combined categories, with $72
million
.
After
this
,
largest
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the largest
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export
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exports
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 are Other and Machinery at $35
million
 and 30.5
million
 respectively. Fertiliser and cotton
also
exports
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export
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 in
double digit
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 figure with 16.5
million
 and 12
million
. Cars provide the least benefit in exporting to
US
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the US
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 with a
humber
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number
 of $ 6
miilion
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million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, vietnam, export, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • import/export balance
  • sector
  • percentage
  • relative importance
  • comparative analysis
  • similarities and differences
  • noteworthy
  • primary sector
  • secondary sector
  • contribute
  • overall export profile
  • main features
  • summarize
  • context
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