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It is often said "when in Rome, do as Romans do". Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visit? do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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Travelling serves as a bridge for cultural diversity. It gives us the opportunity to understand the places we visit including their cultures, beliefs, traditions and behaviours.
Culture
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 depicts the history of a country, I believe that travellers should follow and respect what the country has to offer.
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,
people
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 who travel have the chance to know their
culture
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. It is substantial that acceptance of one's
culture
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 will lead us to easily adapt their
culture
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.
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,
people
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 from Asian countries like the Philippines have different cultures when it comes to eating rice during a meal, meanwhile,
people
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 from Western countries are not fond of eating it.
Moreover
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, we have beliefs that may be different to others.
Therefore
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, before we visit a country we should know the differences
in
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between
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 our
culture
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 to theirs
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so
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us
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we
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 to easily adapt to their
culture
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.
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,language can be a hindrance to understanding
people
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 if we don't know anything about it.
People
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 usually show their thoughts and feelings through speaking.
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, if an Asian woman first time to visit British-speaking countries, she will definitely have a hard time expressing herself as the natives do not understand her language.
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, it is very important as it is
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 way of communicating with other
people
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.
To conclude
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, these two are the most
things
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important things
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 to consider when visiting a specific place, but I believe that it is not necessary to speak their dialects as it will take time to learn
it
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them
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.
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, the possibility of adapting to the
culture
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 is very high even if no one teaches us and without the need to learn their language.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adapt
  • accept
  • local customs
  • cultural immersion
  • enhance the travel experience
  • build relationships
  • smooth communication
  • misunderstandings
  • social isolation
  • conflicts
  • language barrier
  • cultural insights
  • participate in cultural activities
  • observe
  • local customs
  • language learning
  • deeper understanding
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