The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of citizens who participated in four types of sports in one region from 1985 to 2005.
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It is clear that
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number
of Use synonyms
people
who joined Use synonyms
basketball
activity was a downward trend Use synonyms
while
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tennis
shows an upward trend.
In 1985, the Use synonyms
number
of citizens who participated in Use synonyms
basketball
activity was the highest and was around 250 Use synonyms
people
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while
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figure
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of
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for
tennis
was around 150 Use synonyms
people
. In 1995, the Use synonyms
figure
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of
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for
basketball
slightly decreased to 200 Use synonyms
people
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at
the same range Change preposition
in
with
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as
people
who play Use synonyms
tennis
which gradually increased. The Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
tennis
players reached over 200 Use synonyms
people
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In contrast
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figure
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of
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for
basketball
dramatically declined after 1995 to 50 Use synonyms
people
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at the end
of the period and declined to the same point Linking Words
with
rugby.
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as
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
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figure
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figures
of
badminton and rugby remained the same around 90 and 50 Change preposition
for
people
respectively. throughout the periods.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, basketball, tennis, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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