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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: •say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food •suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future Write at least 150 words.

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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, I'm the meeting-organize manager in the "Local Products" company. Our
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 meeting took place in your hotel 3 days ago. I have some feedback from the participants, and I'm writing
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 letter with the purpose of sharing their opinions with you. First of all, let me, please, express our admiration for your staff. The hotel was prepared better than we could expect. A lot of variety of gadgets, a huge meeting room, and comfortable tables and chairs.
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, we had a pretty amazing buffet right in the meeting room.
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, it was plenty of beverages like fresh lemonade, tea and coffee. Your cleaning team is the best I have ever seen. But it was a fly in the ointment. We were not delighted with the lunch we had. As you know, Mediterranean cuisine is something very specific, that not everyone likes. There were some of my co-workers, that have stayed starving, because of the sort of dishes. In conclusion, I want to suggest you
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scrutinize with your clients their preferences in food before you accept their order. Best regards, sincerely yours. Anastassia.

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task achievement
The letter offers a detailed response to the task prompt and addresses all parts of the question. However, refining the tone to be more formal consistently could enhance its suitability for a professional context.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring the letter with clear paragraph breaks to separate different ideas more distinctly. This will improve readability and organization.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized with distinct paragraphs addressing different aspects of the feedback.
task achievement
The response thoroughly addresses the task prompt by detailing both positive and negative feedback, along with a specific suggestion for improvement.
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