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Many young people today spend too much time.e following the latest fashion trends in areas such as clothing and technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globally, the younger generations seem obsessed with style and technology.
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this
 statement by addressing the culture of Gen X,Y,
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and their models. In the
rapidily
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rapidly
 changing context of our contemporary times which speed up all our habits, the youngsters are certainly the
one
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 more responsive. The
hyper connected
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 society made them always updated on the newest
product
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products
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, especially through their beloved social networks.
Moreover
, the obsolescence embedded in our devices
along with
 the new fashion trends made kids highly stimulated to buy,
for example
, the latest
Iphone
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iPhone
 or the
last
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 edition of Nike shoes. On top of that, the models of Gen X,Y,
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are influencers, football players, pop stars, actors or just
milioners
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millions
. Over the
last
 decades, taking advantage of
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social media, these figures become references
of
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 the most famous brands in the market.
This
 led younger people to desire constantly something that they don't have, like a t-shirt dressed by Chiara Ferragni, or the ultimate version of Play Station where Ronaldo crosses better than before. In conclusion,
due to
 the overstimulation in
consuming
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, the
last
 generations are more exposed to
accept
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 and
acquired
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 the
last
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 product.
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