A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend and recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited before. You should say: * where you went * where you stayed and * what you can do there.

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Dear Mandeep, How are you? I want to tell you and recommend

about

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the location where I spent my

vocations

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vacation

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Firstly

, as I told you

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about my

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vocation

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vacation

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trip that I enjoyed in

mackoka

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Mackoka

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This

place is famous for Santa Village and there is one special park where they

did

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activities on special

oscassion

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occasions

occasion

Moreover

this

is not too far from Brampton. It is just 4

hours

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drive by car and me and my friends

enjoyed

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during long drive.

Secondly

, we stayed in one hotel and booked two

room

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there. The name of

hotel

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the hotel

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was Marigold. They gave us

number

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a number

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of facilities

as well as

special

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a special

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offer during booking. The view

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indoor

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indoors

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and

outdoor

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was

fambulous

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fabulous

. I will give you the contact of

hotel

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the hotel

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you can book online with

discount

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a discount

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Lastly

, we

also

bought entry tickets

and

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enjoyed numerous rides and

did

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had

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lots of fun. The fantastic thing was that we had

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a greate

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greate

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great

experience of

borfire

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bonfire

. Well, capture some pictures and videos for

long lasting

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memories. I just recommend

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you definitely go there once during your holiday period. Lots of love, Harpreet

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coherence cohesion

Try to improve the logical structure of your letter by organizing your ideas more clearly and avoiding repeated phrases. For example, you can group similar ideas together and use transition words to link them smoothly.

task achievement

Check your spelling and grammar for small errors. For example, 'vocational' should be 'vacation', 'mackoka' should be capitalized, and 'greate' should be 'great'.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which helps set the tone for a friendly and warm message.

task achievement

You provided specific details about your trip, such as the name of the hotel and the activities you did, which makes the recommendation more convincing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

183 words

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