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The chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment

The chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment
The provided bar graph illustrates the standard working
hours
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 each day by married partners in paid jobs.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that paid workers dominate the average number of
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 worked each day compared to chores performed at home.
To begin
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 with, husbands who have occupations between the
ages
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 of 22 and 44 work approximately 5
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 more than husbands who work at home without pay.
Furthermore
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, the majority of married women are wage
labor
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labour
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 women.
In addition
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, the domination of working
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 at
ages
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 from 45 to 64 are partnered workers. The husband
throughout
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between
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ages
Correct article usage
the ages
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 45 to 64
controls
Wrong verb form
are controlled
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 significantly by paid work
husband
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husbands
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 compared to househusbands
in
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of
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 the same
ages
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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