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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs show
production
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 levels of three main fuels in the United Kingdom, consisting
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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, coal and natural gas. The data was preserved from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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,
Petroleum
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have
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has
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 the highest
production
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 among all.
Although
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 have
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 trend, the
production
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 of
petroleum
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 is still dominating. The
production
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on
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of
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 natural gas was inclined
in
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from
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 1981 to 2000. On
other
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the other
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 hand,
coal's
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coal
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production
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had
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apply
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declined through those years.
According to
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 the ghraphs,
petroleum
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production
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 is inclining
in
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from
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 1981 to 1984, but it was stagnant until 1987. After that period, the
production
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 was
decrease
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decreased
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 until 1990.
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, it can be seen that it slowly
increase
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increased
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 until 2000. On
other
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the other
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 hand, natural
gas'
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gas
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production
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 was stagnant from 1981 to 1990, but it significantly
increases
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increased
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 after that, and
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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100 Energy Units in 2000.
Nonetheless
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,
the
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apply
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coal's
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coal
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production
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 was stagnant from 1981 to 1983
,
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 and
decreases
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decreased
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 sharply in 1984. Despite the
production
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was increase
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increased
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 until 1986, it
continues
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continued
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 to decline to below 40 Energy Units in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, petroleum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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