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In many countries, it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
Nowadays it is
illigal
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illegal
 to smoke in public places in many countries all around the world. It is said that smokers have to leave the building not to interfere with other, non-smoking
people
. I would agree with
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 of view and in the next paragraphs will detail my opinion. First of all, smoking kills.
Moreover
, it can be dangerous not only for the smoking person
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 but even for their surroundings. Researches show that passive smoking can bring even more harm to the innocent person, than to the smoker. In my opinion, public smoking looks a lot like depriving the choice
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 the other - of
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 you can stay away from the smoker, but the scent and
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 will catch you up.
Thus
people
 around have no other option but
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 themselves with
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nicotine. Second of all, I would not limit public
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 only to the buildings. It
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 includes parks,
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, railway
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, airports and so on. My biggest concern is that public smoking can be extremely dangerous for
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pregnant women, kids and elders.
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, you never know if the person you smoke near
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has some disease. In general, there
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should be separate smoking areas, where you can relax and not
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bring any harm to
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non-smoking
people
.
To conclude
, I must say that your personal poor health and life choices should not affect other
people
 who clearly chose
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 healthy lifestyle. And I wish that nicotine
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 displayed in the media as a poison and a way to get
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cancer, not as an aesthetic
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. That`s why smoking in public areas should remain banned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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