In many countries, it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

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who wish to
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should have to leave the building
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now it is illegal to
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in public
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. I think it is very good on one
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and may have some negative aspects
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. Every cloud has its silver lining. On the one
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it is really good that now it is illegal to
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in public
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. It can impact badly for our bodies and our nature.
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people
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who do not like cigarettes do not need to worry about which place to visit.
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breathing
smoke
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might be even more dangerous than smoking at all.
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, my friend has health problems and we had to look for
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special cafes all the time. Now smoking in public
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is forbidden
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it is much easier. I think it is good.
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, avoiding smoking helps to protect our health and save time for
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with some illnesses.
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,
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rules might have negative results.
People
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who used to
smoke
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everywhere might be angry
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that and refuse to visit
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where
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totally forbidden. Quite often, I hear unsatisfied thoughts from my friends.
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, they call
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country rules as discrimination. As an example, I heard a small talk where two
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people
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were smoking and talking. One of them
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said
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that it is not fair that
people
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who wish to
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should have to leave the building.
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, the fact that it is illegal to
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in public
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in many countries has good and bad sides.

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End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
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Gives both sides of the argument.
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Has a clear 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' form.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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