The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides information about the proportion of
the
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students
who
learn
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learned
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to play four different instruments in 2005, 2010 and 2015.
It is clear that
number
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a number
the number
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of
children
learning to play
violin
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the violin
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is showing a decreasing trend
while
others are increasing
in
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apply
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every 5 years. First of all, we can see that most of the
students
learned piano during the period and it shows an increasing tendency. In 2005, slightly more than 10% of the
students
learned how to play piano. The figure rose to 20% in 2010 and doubled in 2015 as it is
a
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the
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main musical
instrument
to play when
children
start music. It was followed by guitar where 10% of school
children
tried to learn. The rate increased to approximately 18% in 2010 and peaked at the rate of 40% in 2015 indicating that guitar became a popular
instrument
Drum
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The drum
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was the least popular
instrument
children
pursued to learn. The figure remained stable in 2005 and 2010 at 5%.
Then
it slightly increased to almost 10% in 2015.
Violin
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The violin
show examples
was the only
instrument
that showed a decreasing trend. About 9% of
students
chose to play
violin
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the violin
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in 2005 and
then
it decreased to 5% in ten years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, children, instrument with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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