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The chart below shows what Engineering graduates from a London university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Engineers in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Engineering graduates from a London university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Engineers in work after five years.
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The pie chart below shows what Engineering
graduates
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 from a London University did after undergraduate degree courses,
while
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 the table illustrates the incomes of Engineers in work after five years.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the pie chart, the overwhelming majority of Engineering students were employed full-time.
Additionally
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,
according to
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 the table, the highest salaries of Engineering
graduates
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 came from freelance and government. Regarding the pie chart, just over half of the
graduates
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 worked full-time and 15% of these
graduates
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 had a part-time job.
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, a small minority of
graduates
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 did not have a job and another 8% of students did not disclose their employment status.
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, a very tiny portion of these students had postgraduate study and part-time work, including part-time study. As can be seen from the table, the highest salaries came to the workers in freelance and government, who had an income of £100,000, 40% and 50%, respectively.
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, most of the
graduates
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 that worked in private had salaries of about £50,000-£74,999, 35%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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