Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers.

Nowadays, pupils chained their
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gadgets. In my
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, there are some problems
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phenomenon which are lacking
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critical thinking ability and
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skill of
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relations. The solutions that I suggest are fostering interest
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books
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care with friends directly.
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computer influences caused decreasing
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thinking
competences
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even
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of
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. The smart computers
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completed
features
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facilitations for every
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problems.
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, teacher
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tasks for
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then
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instead
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his own,
student
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students
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prefer to seek
answer
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answers
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by clicking their gadget
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that
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is
easiest
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way to solve questions.
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, it not only
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their competencies
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but
also
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declining
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quality of social life. The smart computers offer games, content videos, or meta-friends. The facilities decreased intimating time between classmates
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affected
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personalities.
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, students who are
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computer
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computers
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can develop
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books
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engagement and share
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care between
friend
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friends
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directly. Reading various
books
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help
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students to look at different
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perspective
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or situations. Pupils will have good
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or
point
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points
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of
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a problem.
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A book gave information about British history by
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while
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B book explained British undercover by immigrants.
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close relations must
build
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between friends
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school age.
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may provide special time for students to share their emotions that improves care-personality between them. In conclusion, individuals who
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gadget
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have low thinking
ability
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abilities
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and no social interest. So,
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fun
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with
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books
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and having close
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conversations
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with friends are solutions
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problems.

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