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A friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the problem explain what happened to you in the past suggest possible solutions to the problem.

#friend #advice #work
Hi Irwan, I am writing
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 about a problem at work that I had in the past. First of all,
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 problem in Java is very common;
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 we don’t realize the mistake. It can be caused by
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 decoder or encoder if you want to translate the value. Another thing that can
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 is caused by no constructor for the class that you want to assign.
To begin
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 logs didn’t show me the root of the problem. It confused me; since
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 I had already checked the flow of the logic; yet, nothing was wrong. From my experience, you can try to put some logging on Java codes;
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built into a framework to detect the root cause easily. I hope the best for you, I am waiting for your reply Yours Sincerely, Stevin.
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Try to merge sentences for smoother transitions between ideas, and ensure clarity by reducing repetitive phrases.
task achievement
Including more detail or examples to explain solutions could strengthen your response.
task achievement
Improve the complexity and accuracy of your vocabulary and grammar to better match the desired writing tone for the IELTS.
greeting and closing
Good job on using a structure that includes a greeting, body, and closing.
complete response
You have successfully addressed your friend's problem, explained your experience, and suggested potential solutions.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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