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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph displays data about the percentages of
people
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 who buy and drink hot drinks in Australia's main 5 cities over one month. The X-axis shows the five different cities
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 the percentage of
people
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 is presented on the y-axis.
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, what stands out from the graph is that the percentage of
people
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 who bought instant coffee in Australia is higher than the number of
people
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 who bought fresh coffee.
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, the percentage of
people
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 who like fresh coffee in Brisban is the lowest
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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