Universities should accept equal number of male and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some people believe an equal number of males and females should be accepted in every field. I disagree with
this
point of view wholeheartedly. My view is elaborated in the following.
Firstly
, different genders have different a wide range of preferences.
Hence
, they not be able to do completely similar tasks and study in one particular subject.
For instance
,
men
would rather study fields that are inextricably intertwined with physics,
mathematic
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, and
engineer
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.
In addition
, the majority of
men
have
tendencies
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to do handiwork.
On the other hand
, women have the inclination to do paperwork. As a second reason, different sexes have a variety of abilities and capacities.
Although
in
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both genders,
it
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can be seen several exceptions,
men
generally are
favourable
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selection for physically demanding work that needs a lot of energy. Not only do
men
have particular properties, but women
also
have unique characteristics.
For example
, women are superior in memorizing in comparison with
men
.
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  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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