Some believes that professional, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some
people
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that
professional
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professionals
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in medicine and
engineers
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should stay
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within
their own country where they studied.
Others
argue that they should service
others
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countries
for free if they want to. In my
opinion
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the
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proffesional
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professionals
should
contribuite
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contribute
to their community but
also
to
others
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countries
if they wish to. In
this
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i
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will argue about
this
phenomenon. Nowadays, careers like medicine and
engineers
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engineering
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have a big worldwide demand. In many
countries
, \ professionals have been emigrating to Europe or Australia looking for a better quality of life.
As a result
, a lack of
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attention in
third world
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countries
.
Otherwise
,
government
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should
incentive
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their graduates in order
give
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them
a good projects
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good projects
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with good salaries.
For instance
, a study from Buenos Aires University (UBA) affirms that 35% of
their
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scientist and doctors
leaves
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the country because they cannot find a job. These graduates studied in Public Universities for free.
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the other hand, professionals could help to
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the well-being of
others
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countries
. As we may know, with the climate changes big cyclons and
catastrofe
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catastrophe
happens around the world.
For
this
reason, it is important for doctors to
maintain
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informed about these situations.
Consequently
,
people
could help
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people
for
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in
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others
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other
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countries
where can apply their knowledge.
For instance
,
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Associations
like CRUZ ROJA is a
pretigious
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prestigious
group, integrated for emergency professionals who
helps
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many suffering
people
around the world in
the
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wars,
diplomatics
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problems or natural
disaster
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disasters
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In conclusion,despite the fact of
the
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tremedous
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tremendous
advantages of graduates working
whitin
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within
the country, it is important to give them the opportunity to help and give their services to
others
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nations if
is
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necessary.
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task achievement
Work on providing clearer and more comprehensive ideas. For example, explaining why doctors and engineers might want to leave or stay could add depth to your response.
task achievement
Ensure examples directly relate to the argument you are making. The example from Buenos Aires University supports your point but could be integrated more smoothly into the paragraph.
coherence cohesion
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Expand on your conclusion to reinforce your arguments effectively. Summarizing main points can help coherence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brain drain
  • expatriates
  • repay
  • enhanced
  • remittances
  • international cooperation
  • cultural diversity
  • global best practices
  • economic incentives
  • working conditions
  • political stability
  • human right
  • freedom of movement
  • investment in education
  • skill shortage
  • career growth
  • push and pull factors
  • migration
  • global health crises
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