parents are putting a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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success
in every moment. In order to Replace the word
successful
achive
the pinnacle Correct your spelling
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parents
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children
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pressure
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the pressure
children
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the
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apply
children
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postive
aspect.
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positive
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reasons
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a lot
pressure
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social status. To be more precise, nowadays competition Correct pronoun usage
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apply
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think
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a higher
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of
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other Correct your spelling
achieving
sport
activities that will give Change the noun form
sports
the
honour in Correct article usage
apply
the
society, not only to the Correct article usage
apply
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but Correct your spelling
adolescents
also
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workloads
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of workloads
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apply
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dance
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dance
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lack of interest.
I think, putting Change the word
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children
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affect dramatically on their mental health. Correct your spelling
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effects
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lot
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be leads
to danger for their lives Change the verb form
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apply
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girl Correct word choice
that a
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who attempt
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attempted
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apply
as
she Correct word choice
because
coundn't
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couldn't
Furthurmore
, students Correct your spelling
Furthermore
likely
to be engaging in Add a missing verb
are likely
the
illegal activities Correct article usage
apply
such
as cheating in Linking Words
the
exams and blaming Correct article usage
apply
the
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their
parents
, which activities Use synonyms
becoming
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become
endengerd
for their lives. Correct your spelling
endangered
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the
student catching Correct article usage
a
while
he is cheating in the Linking Words
goverment
exams in my country they Correct your spelling
government
banned
to sit Wrong verb form
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the exam
an exam
exam
. for 5 years.
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exams
To conclude
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parents
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putting on
so Wrong verb form
put
many
stress on their Correct quantifier usage
much
children
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due to
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the
personal status , but it Change the word
their
cause
always negative impact Verb problem
apply
in
Change preposition
on
chilren
since that leads to Correct your spelling
children
youngesters
in a negative way. So,Correct your spelling
youngsters
parents
should take some feasible measures to tackle these kinds of mistakes in Use synonyms
the
Change the word
their
Use synonyms
children
life.Change noun form
children's
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