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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph presents the amount of electricity produced and
usage
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 in 2014, comparing ten
countries
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, which are
China
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, The United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and The Republic of Korea. The data is measured in
billion
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kWh
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. It can be clearly seen that
China
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 was
on
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 the highest position
that
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followed by the US for both electricity production and consumption. Meanwhile, the remaining
countries
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 were far behind them.
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, all of the
countries
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 had a similar number between their production and their consumption.
China
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 had a higher number of production than
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consumption, which
5,398
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 and 5,322 respectively.
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, the United States was only lower roughly around 1,000
billion
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kWh
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 from
China
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. There were several
countries
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 which had a range of amount for both
aspect
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 from 600 to 400
billion
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kWh
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, they were France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea, from higher to lower. Meanwhile, Russia, Japan, India, and Canada were still above 600
billion
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kWh
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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