The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares data about how much
coffee
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and tea
drunk
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is drunk
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in 5 various cities in Australia.
Overall
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, it was important that all of the cities' inhabitants except Adelaide went to the
cafe
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for
coffee
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or tea
while
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a few of them bought fresh
coffee
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.
According to
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the diagram, a large number of Hobart, which was the main area with the highest percentage of drinking and buying hot drinks, citizen went to the
cafe
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to drink tea and
coffee
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owing to the fact that it was 63%;
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Bought instant and fresh
coffee
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respectively 54% and 39%. The second city was Melbourne, which had the same trend as the prior,
also
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, it had the same proportion as the
last
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one in the initial reason;
thereafter
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, the instance was 48% and fresh was upper the 40%. Sydney, the third district had the same direction as Hobart, the main reason roughly the same as others;
furthermore
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, two others have nearly the same percentage as 43%. The graph demonstrates that Brisban went to the
cafe
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and bought instant
coffee
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had approximately the same amount and it was about 55% after that fresh type was 34%.
In contrast
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to all regions, a majority of communities who lived in Adelaide, which was the
last
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town, went to the
cafe
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by 50%. Later fresh was popular by less than 40%;
additionally
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,
finally
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, bought fast
coffee
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was 34%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cafe with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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